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DESCRIBE
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THE FIRST 2 entries from each Year 4 class ( 4I and 4V) will get points.
The best for each class will get 500 points. The others will get points on merit.
ONLY FOUR ENTRANTS - THAT MEANS ONLY 4 NAMES!
Those entrants for will get TWO shots (if needed). That means I will check the description and offer some pointers (assistance).
GOOD LUCK!
PHIL
29 comments:
The model is wearing unusual black and gray 2in1 jacket with a single button.With an exiting combination of bright contrasting overlay tecnic in the skirt.
She is wearing an atractive black headband.
She looks perfect with an unusual colourful face painting.
She looks extreamly gorgeous!
Feodora 4V
The model is wearing black and grey jacket with buttons on it.She is wearing light yellow,pink,purple and pink stripe unusual skirt.
With pink socks and purple open toed higheels.
She paint her face with white paints.
With a black hairband.
Chelsea 4I
Feo "with" is a conjunction (kata sambung), so the sentence should carry on. Change to "exciting skirt combination" and stop after "overlay."
"extremely". - Spelling.
Usually we don't comment on the model.
Perhaps the ensemble is "gorgeous and high-spirited." (semangat) Use "ensemble"; It means a combination.
Have a second shot.
Phil
Chelsea. "a black and grey" not buttons- studs"
"an unusual, , brilliant, multicoloured, ...pink striped"
Not socks! "ankle stockings"
desribe the purple id you can.
After studs, talk about the headband, it's better there.
Face paint.
Have a second shot now Chelsea.
Phil
The model is wearing unusual black and gray 2in1 jacket with a single button with an exiting skirt ensemble of bright contrasting overlay that is gorgeous and high-spirited.
She is wearing an atractive black headband.
She looks perfect with an unusual colourful face painting.
Feodora 4V
spelling-"exciting"
better ..."gorgeous ensemble in bright, high-spitited, contrasting overlays."
the model is wearing an extraordinary looking jacket with a single button and two large collars . she's also wearing so many bracelet on both her left and right arms . she's sporting two pairs of ankle stockings with an unusual , white striped light yellow and pink cloth above her skirt . she's wearing two pairs of purple open toed higheels with pink socks . she paint her face with black , white and red paint with a black head band across her forehead and a curly hair style .
Andre 4v
The Model is wearing an unsual Black and long sleeves jacket with stripes all around it, and grey for the outline.With diffrent fun kinds of bright colour and motif fabric that attached to each other And a purple striped legging.
The Jacket is fastened with a white large button.
she is wearing cute pink ankle stockings with matching purple open toed high heels.
She is also wearing a fashionable black headband, with a really unsual coulourful Make-up.
She looks Extremly fashionable!!!
Jessica 4V
The model is wearing unusual black and gray 2in1 jacket with a single button with an exciting skirt ensemble of bright contrasting overlay that is gorgeous ensemble in bright, high-spirited, contrasting overlays.
She is wearing an atractive black headband.
She looks perfect with an unusual colourful face painting.
Feodora 4V
Mr.P i think it must be high-spirited not high spitited.????
Feo
Feo, take out the second "ensemble" and it's all Ok and worth some points for a little squirrel.
Phil
Andre - a good start. try to use capital letters at the beginning of sentences!
Avoid "so many" just say several on BOTH wrists or arms. Describe the skirt before the footwear. use multilayered, bold, bright, eye-catching.
Have a second shot.
Phil
Jessica, Why oh, why do you capital letters in the middle of nowhere for no reason? Oh, I know why....!!!
say "long-sleeved", "dark striped jacket", "bold grey border", "cloours", "leggings' use a word like "lively" to describe the dress clours.
This is the first model ever to wear 4 shoes!!!!
Describe the headband better by adding one more word to catch the emotion of it - the style - "eye-catching", something like that.
Have a second shot without all the randomly placed , meaningless, childish, and boring CAPITAL LETTERS!!!
GGGRRRRR!!!!
Phil
The model is wearing unusual black and gray 2in1 jacket with a single button with an exciting skirt ensemble of bright contrasting overlay that is gorgeous in bright, high-spirited, contrasting overlays.
She is wearing an atractive black headband.
She looks perfect with an unusual colourful face painting.
Feodora 4V
Charlie get your second shot in ASAP!
P.
The Model is wearing an unusual Black and long sleeved jacket with dark striped jacket all around it, and bold gray border with different bright colours and motif fabric that attached to each other and a purple striped lively legging.
The Jacket is fastened with a white large button.
she is wearing cute pink ankle stockings with matching purple open toed high heels.
She is also wearing a fashionable eye-catching black headband, with a really unusual coulourful Make-up.
She looks Extremly fashionable!!!
JESSICA 4V
Jessica, get some anti-capital letter medication! Look "model and "jacket" do noe need to be capitailzed.
GGGRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Phil
Hello Charlie, come in please, "May Day, May Day!"
Feo, Take 500 points. Well done.
Fast, accurate and natural.
Phil
The model is wearing an unusual black and long sleeved jacket with dark striped jacket all around it, and bold gray border with different bright colours and motif fabric that attached to each other and a purple striped lively legging.
The jacket is fastened with a white large button.
she is wearing cute pink ankle stockings with matching purple open toed high heels.
She is also wearing a fashionable eye-catching black headband, with a really unusual coulourful Make-up.
She looks extremly fashionable!!!
JESSICA 4V
The model is wearing a black and grey jacket with studs on it.
She wears a blck headband.
She wears a brilliant, multicoloured, pink striped skirt.
with ankle stockings and purple high heels.
And she do her face paint.
This one up here is mine and I forgot to put my name.
Chelsea
Jessica's deleted the comments, the comments!
Jessica's deleted the comments, tra di da di daaa.
Not too bad Chelsea - try tp stick to "is wearing" though rather than "wears"
I think you've done well though.
Phil
The model is wearing a black and grey jacket with studs.
She is wearing a black headband and a brilliant, multicoloured, pink striped skirt
with pink ankle stockings and purple high heels
She also wearing an unusual face paint.
OK Chelsea, this is much better and so you get 550 points. Your group should be greatful to you for being so alert and industrious.
Jessica gets 200, Andre 1.
Phil
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